tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post5381180847321536713..comments2024-01-05T15:42:46.899-05:00Comments on Katie O'Sullivan ~ Read, Write, Repeat: A to Z Blogfest: The Letter EKatie O'Sullivanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17295418503546522882noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post-46545634844316461692012-04-11T09:42:49.831-04:002012-04-11T09:42:49.831-04:00Thanks for the positive feedback, everyone.
And t...Thanks for the positive feedback, everyone.<br /><br />And thanks for the style compliment, Mark! My older son is very verbal in sharing his feelings - something of an open book - which helps when I'm writing from a boy's POV. The younger son is not quite as verbal, but can sometimes express himself so precisely that I question if he's really only 14.Katie O'Sullivanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295418503546522882noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post-23727114918978479822012-04-11T09:37:06.061-04:002012-04-11T09:37:06.061-04:00I loved this excerpt in the way I hated the tensio...I loved this excerpt in the way I hated the tension it reminded me of experiencing in high school... that is, the style (noted by other commenters) and pace seemed appropriate of the age and true to the way our minds and bodies worked at that age... both unpredictably at times. That's a gift you have for putting yourself in the boys' perspective watching the pretty girl flirting with the rich boy as a freshman. Thanks for sharing!!fearnothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00809014939963826354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post-42745755876360874122012-04-06T08:04:50.253-04:002012-04-06T08:04:50.253-04:00Wonderful excerpt :)Wonderful excerpt :)Jack Edwards Poetryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11813177533690643652noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post-33708167509963772012-04-05T22:58:07.958-04:002012-04-05T22:58:07.958-04:00oooh, great excerpt. Love your puppy too.
nice to...oooh, great excerpt. Love your puppy too.<br /><br />nice to meet you.<br /><br />TeresaT. Powell Coltrinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02160774009926623671noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post-67348141728634236222012-04-05T18:30:30.682-04:002012-04-05T18:30:30.682-04:00Great excerpt! Something strange is happening to t...Great excerpt! Something strange is happening to this character . . . now I wonder what it is. :)<br /><br /><br />The Golden Eagle<br /><a href="http://thegoldeneaglesblog.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">The Eagle's Aerial Perspective</a>Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post-12412064040422502282012-04-05T13:08:47.611-04:002012-04-05T13:08:47.611-04:00Thank you, Susan and Sherry! See, this is why you ...Thank you, Susan and Sherry! See, this is why you need other people to read your work before you submit! Thank you guys, so much!<br /><br />I've gone through and taken out all but one of the stupids. Anything else?Katie O'Sullivanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17295418503546522882noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post-43176685246227567312012-04-05T12:54:00.584-04:002012-04-05T12:54:00.584-04:00I think your excerpt is really good. I like the i...I think your excerpt is really good. I like the intensity you created by using short sentences at the beginning. The only thing I noticed was the use of the word, "stupid." You might want to change it up a bit. (My critique group always gets me for that sort of thing.) Good luck with it!Sherry Ellishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07844837212122243321noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post-45685603554281347292012-04-05T10:54:49.937-04:002012-04-05T10:54:49.937-04:00Katie, You've set such a great scene here. I l...Katie, You've set such a great scene here. I like the voice and the tension. I'll have to read through it again, but the only thing I noticed was you used "stupid" three times. I am a stickler for variety in word choice. I also think you have the word "came" two times in one sentence. All very minor stuff, of course. As a whole, this is wonderful. I like that it's from a male POV, too.Susan Oloierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07311938400999953443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6831433709810155834.post-35212164310351775582012-04-05T06:31:08.902-04:002012-04-05T06:31:08.902-04:00I would luv to have him to hold my letters.I would luv to have him to hold my letters.Teahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04246834295123351186noreply@blogger.com